- DESIGN 1 / INDA International Program / Chulalongkorn faculty of architecure / BANGKOK - The studio follows the general brief and schedule given to all second year students.
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The Garden of Time (Jane)
what can i do to improve this?? the form (clock) what can i change?
yes, i was there. from what i understand in you and aj connelly comment is.
1. from my verbal is not easy to understand 2. aj connelly dont like my clock form 3. and you said you dont like the color, because everything is black and white everthing should divided by using color, to see the layer more 4. you both said there is many element, a detail in my diagram.
mostly from what i understand it seem like you guys want me to change the clock figure .... isn't and is there any more?? and i saw that you put a picture of different diagram for mew ... do you have any example for me to look at??? like i want to improve this diagram but i want some advice and direction for you
Ok - i appreciate the effort you are now making It is your work after all.
So the main comment on my side was that your diagram actually had a lot of information embedded (which is good) but you do not give the keys to read it precisely. Adding annotations, words, colour coding etc. would help a lot. This exercise is not only about making a beautiful illustration but also about giving information that can be read.
Look at the diagram i posted before for example (and you could even learn from the musical ones...) - the genealogical circle diagram for the Eskimos : It is arranged in concentric circles according to time (since it is a genealogy, it makes sense to have a smaller circle as a starting point (less ancestors than children...) - each circle corresponds to a year, and you can even see sub-circles in between the main ones.
So//// the point is obviously not to copy an existing diagram (you can also look at the pdf from the lecture i gave) - the point is to understand their logic, get inspiration, and create your own logic. Also, think about the hierarchy of information your diagram is displaying... what would we see first, and then if we pay closer attention ?
oh one more question?? so do you like my temporal artery vein part?? should i take it out??? and how about the clock shape? The clock shape was like my main concept , so when i take it out it seem like i just change all of my concept...
You can keep the clock as a starting organization but then modify it. (see fr example john cage diagrams below wih te music partition...) And yes I liked the veins also but again be more specific (scientific) with them.
Where were you during your own review??
ReplyDeleteyes, i was there. from what i understand in you and aj connelly comment is.
ReplyDelete1. from my verbal is not easy to understand
2. aj connelly dont like my clock form
3. and you said you dont like the color, because everything is black and white
everthing should divided by using color, to see the layer more
4. you both said there is many element, a detail in my diagram.
mostly from what i understand it seem like you guys want me to change the clock figure .... isn't
and is there any more?? and i saw that you put a picture of different diagram for mew ... do you have any example for me to look at??? like i want to improve this diagram but i want some advice and direction for you
thanks :)
Ok - i appreciate the effort you are now making
ReplyDeleteIt is your work after all.
So the main comment on my side was that your diagram actually had a lot of information embedded (which is good) but you do not give the keys to read it precisely.
Adding annotations, words, colour coding etc. would help a lot.
This exercise is not only about making a beautiful illustration but also about giving information that can be read.
Look at the diagram i posted before for example (and you could even learn from the musical ones...) - the genealogical circle diagram for the Eskimos :
It is arranged in concentric circles according to time (since it is a genealogy, it makes sense to have a smaller circle as a starting point (less ancestors than children...) - each circle corresponds to a year, and you can even see sub-circles in between the main ones.
So//// the point is obviously not to copy an existing diagram (you can also look at the pdf from the lecture i gave) - the point is to understand their logic, get inspiration, and create your own logic.
Also, think about the hierarchy of information your diagram is displaying... what would we see first, and then if we pay closer attention ?
i hope this helps
oh one more question?? so do you like my temporal artery vein part?? should i take it out???
Deleteand how about the clock shape? The clock shape was like my main concept , so when i take it out it seem like i just change all of my concept...
thanks a lot :)
ReplyDeleteYou can keep the clock as a starting organization but then modify it. (see fr example john cage diagrams below wih te music partition...)
ReplyDeleteAnd yes I liked the veins also but again be more specific (scientific) with them.